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song 2
Nov 19, 2003 14:44:20 GMT
Post by Rob on Nov 19, 2003 14:44:20 GMT
song 2, version c I tried to take on everyones advice about making the song less monotonous (put some defined changes in it, and add some lead), raising the vocal, (thanks to mcarp555/mattl/latmat,mjd25), but decided to incorporate this into something new. Also tried a different approach to writing. Instead of acoustic guitar and pen and paper, i set a drum to play in "intro" mode forever and then laid the guitar track as i felt, like a jam. then organised the drum, laid the backing vocal for the melody and came back a few days later after a really bad in the office and recorded the main vocal. i was goin to put this up at the weekend (mixed it last saturday) but i was blown away by mattl's effort. so i was listening to it again last night and its ok. it really needs a chorus and i'll work on it...but as ever im grateful for any other guidance from you boys. www.soundclick.com/bands/4/muddybathermusic.htmlater Rob
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song 2
Nov 19, 2003 14:58:16 GMT
Post by mcarp555 on Nov 19, 2003 14:58:16 GMT
I really like the melody; it reminds me a lot of Badfinger. For the kind of song this wants to be, the instrumentation is somewhat sparce; if this is just a demo, that's okay. But if you want to add to this, or remake it, I'd suggest bass and maybe a jangly sort of acoustic. The harp in the intro was a good touch, maybe you could reprise it at the end as well. And yes, it's crying for a really catchy chorus.
I know the feeling you've got, you're groping in the dark towards something, but you're not sure what it is. You're on the right track tho, keep plugging away.
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song 2
Nov 19, 2003 15:03:28 GMT
Post by Rob on Nov 19, 2003 15:03:28 GMT
yep, im searching! youre right.
well i'd really like to throw this out for collaboration, that bloke efkay would be first choice for bass, mattl could provide keyboards....and someone for some lead? and one of you sonf writers for the "catchy" chorus...
anyone who wants in let me know. i can put whatever files are needed up...just let me know how to do this!
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song 2
Nov 19, 2003 16:10:30 GMT
Post by mattl on Nov 19, 2003 16:10:30 GMT
Rob its great.. if ya want email/private msg me the lyrics.. thye ahhh ahhh ahh at around 128-150 could be the notes of the chorus doncha think? yea it does remind me of onea those old bands.. maybe it was badfinger. sounds good! better than my first ones for sure!
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song 2
Nov 19, 2003 16:47:38 GMT
Post by latmat on Nov 19, 2003 16:47:38 GMT
Hey rob
I agree with mike its a good melody and is dying for a good chorus, something that will really soar. I think the Ahhahhs would work for a prechorus type build up where you could come in heavier with more instrumentation. Or just a thicker sound. Yea its dieing for a great chorus. Keep at her man.
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song 2
Nov 19, 2003 18:36:12 GMT
Post by Rob on Nov 19, 2003 18:36:12 GMT
just noticed the collaboration notice board...i'll go there next time...
lyrics: song 2
didnt i tell you where to go/ tell you when to go tell you thats enough didnt i say
do it again do it, tempt me now push me to the ground/push me pull me down lets see what you say
chorus please!
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