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Post by sgulley on Sept 7, 2004 3:12:18 GMT
I took the chords (named Fight the good fight, had to call it something) that I made up last week & that Mike & Matt suggested I finish. So I tried to line up some lyrics with it.... Man, those riffs seem to distract from any words I put over them. Anyway, I did come with something that almost turned into a short story instead of a song.
There were so many lyrics that I messed up quite a bit, but am not worried about perfection at all right now. Depending on the responses, I am possibliy going to redo the whole thing from scatch and see what happens.
I just posted it in the Stan's Band music so see what you think.
Thanks, Stan
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Post by echobase9 on Sept 7, 2004 3:28:30 GMT
I can hear your voice in Lobotomy.
In the ape song,,, I can't hear a word. And, I have tried with and without the earphones.
this is just me though. what do I know...
edited for goodness sakes!
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Post by mcarp555 on Sept 7, 2004 8:30:34 GMT
I think it's a good step forward. You seem to be having most of the pitch trouble singing during the IV chord, but that may just require more practice. I'd suggest switching the solo and the last verse, so you can fade out or end with the solo, instead of abruptly after the verse. And if you redo it, some sort of break in the middle would keep things from getting too monotonous. Drum solo, middle eight, anything. Calling it Mighty Joe Young is an inspired idea. Sort of like Dylan singing Croce backed by Foghat. Ooh!
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Post by sgulley on Sept 7, 2004 15:13:41 GMT
Yep the lyrics & backing don't mix well at all. This isn't working, because its starting to just sound like repetative noise. Might modify and turn the lyrics into some kind of folk song. As far as the original backing, I can't fit it into any kind of mood or lyrics that would match. Thanks for your comments Mike. Appreciated as always. Stan
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Post by mcarp555 on Sept 7, 2004 20:09:43 GMT
Well hang on to it. You might find at some point in the future you come up with a nice progression and/or verses, and this lick could fit in between the verses. Bach used to recycle his own material, why not you?
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Post by JimDurand on Sept 8, 2004 6:38:56 GMT
Stan,
I sent you some ideas in a PM. I think it would help if the chorus and verse had more contrast. They sound pretty similar in this demo.
Wonderful lyrics, and I love that guitar riff!
Jim
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Post by sgulley on Sept 8, 2004 14:32:17 GMT
OK Jim,
I'm going to give this another chance over the weekend but this time I'm starting with almost completed lyrics instead of starting with a very limited backing track.
Stan
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Post by sgulley on Sept 11, 2004 20:16:02 GMT
Well I tried the same verses, with the same riffs, modified the arrangment a bit, but it still comes off a little out of place with the lyrics/song match.
I really liked the original Strat parts but bounced twice before saving, and really lost some good high-end when I bounced in some bass tracks. Oh well, I think I'm going to try a different approach to mixing, vs. bouncing because I lost some quality on the first bounce but lost a lot on the second one.
I posted the update I you want to comment.
Thanks, Stan
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Post by JimDurand on Sept 13, 2004 3:44:46 GMT
Stan,
It's getting there. I like the breaks you added following each chorus. They work well to introduce the following verse.
Jim
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