|
Post by latmat on Feb 11, 2008 7:29:30 GMT
Hey Mike, and all you guys! Got a new one up that I demoed as a song for Songwriting class... I would have had more up but I've had to use Garageband last symester to be on even ground with the others... Anywho the new teacher wants quality so yeah! lol anywho would much appreciate an comments criticisms or anything! Link is in the signature... Thanks so much!!! Cameron
|
|
|
Post by chrisr on Feb 11, 2008 12:45:18 GMT
Hi Cameron,
Nice song and well worked out !
I would have put the drums (snare & foot) much more in presence in the mix : a clear cut drums would enhance the rythmic feeling of the song, I think.
Chris
|
|
sgulley
Superstar
If you really like music and recording it then never stop trying to get better at it.
Posts: 2,994
|
Post by sgulley on Feb 11, 2008 15:29:20 GMT
Excellent vox and I like the way you perfectly timed the delay setting of your second vocal track. The acoustic guitar sound fat with a great low-end sound but the only thing that I might or might not experiment with is bringing the acoustic guitar up a DB or 2 in the 10-12K range. Very cool song... downloaded into my collection folder Stan
|
|
|
Post by Tom on Feb 11, 2008 17:56:05 GMT
Cameron,
Nice song. Nice lyric and lead guitar especially. To much of what I hear these days in songs of this type seem be missing a nice tasteful guitar solo to complement the rest. Not so this song.
Tom
|
|
|
Post by mcarp555 on Feb 12, 2008 23:23:37 GMT
Live the mystery, indeed!
The lyrics are rich, even if at times obscure (what is BEDMAS, anyway?). The verses seem oddly structured however. I'm not sure where the rhyme is, if there even is one. The melody is as usual, lovely. The playing & mix complement the words nicely, even if it is the Cam formula of "quiet verse, then loud chorus, repeat". The mix could be tweaked here and there, but it's probably more a matter of personal taste than anything else.
My one big suggestion would be in the best part of the song - the "Sometimes I wake up" bit. It's like a roller coaster taking you up to the top, then the drop down is the chorus itself. When it gets to "...and how high", I'd like another measure or two, and the melody to go up another fifth or so on the word 'high', with some slight pause on the backing. Sort of going up another notch and hanging there before the drop into the chorus. I think the transition into the chorus is a mite too quick.
I also wonder how this song would sound with a very muted backing, say just piano and drums, maybe a small brass section, or flutes.
What does the new teach think?
|
|
|
Post by latmat on Feb 18, 2008 6:50:51 GMT
Hey you guys Thanks for the nice Comments and compliment! Ahh Mike! Intresting Ideas as always! BEDMAS is a math Acronym ? an order of how to calculate as to get the "right" answer... Brackets, Exponents, Division, Multipulcation, Adding, Substraction It's funny I thought everyone was taught this as it turns out it's just people around my generation or parents of my generation who had to teach their kids math... My teacher didn't know what this was either... The kids who got it at school thought it quite clever... You know arrangement wise, I just pump these out you know like I just wrote the thing never rehearsed with a band, it's safe and formula-ic but it I think it works with the song too... I do like to have a sense of dynamic however elementary... I thought the change in the second verse with the power chords coming in was nice lol and the double time in the chorus... I've never done that before so in that sense it was some what adventursome. I like the idea about the pre-chorus I think maybe if I did that on the last one to add a little more surpirse even... Could be very cool... The horns and flutes eh. That different, I can't imagine it myself but it maybe cool. I kinda kept it mute, the acoustic is sorta half palm muted and the rhodes... It would be interesting to try... Maybe when I come back to it at some point I already have another demo to do for my next song project so... Yeah to teacher is mostly concerned about lyrics, which is good cause I struggle abit in this area, I think I may have been trying to please her with this one... alot of people think it's not my typical writing but whatever... She never really said what she thought of the arrangement or instrumentation... I think she was just pleasantly surprised to listen to something that was somewhat well engineered and produced... I think the next demo will be a bit of a shock, it really different for me... Thanks again Cameron
|
|