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Post by sgulley on May 24, 2008 17:10:50 GMT
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Post by chrisr on May 24, 2008 22:29:13 GMT
Stan,
I had a quick listen (and a non-volume one, since it's after midnight), so at present, I am unable to comment on any details, but in general : very good song, in my opinion !
One of your best songs so far, if you ask me.
I myself would have kept the lead guitar part simpler, I think, but OK, that's a matter of personal preference.
I may be mistaken, but I notice that you take more time now to work your songs out. That's a good thing, in my opinion.
Well done, Stan !
Chris
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Post by Tom on May 25, 2008 16:38:43 GMT
Nice song Stan. I like hearing you in this style. Well written song chord and melody wise, and nice guitar work on the solo behind it. This one is my favorite from you so far.
Tom
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Post by sgulley on May 25, 2008 19:05:52 GMT
Thanks you guys for taking the time to listen and comment. I took the 2 electric guitars out and replaced them with an acoustic track. I simplified the lead, and redid the vocal track. I think it opened things up and gave this more clarity.
Thanks for your help, Stan
P.S. - I don't know if I'm taking more time to creeate but I do have better tools to mess with. I spent over half the time getting down a solid backing part with the pianos, and drum. The recording stuff was a piece of cake.
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Post by chrisr on May 25, 2008 19:13:19 GMT
Now that I've listened to it at volume, forget what I said about the simpler lead guitar part, Stan. It's OK as it is.
I confirm : a very good song, in my opinion. However, difficult to sing, I imagine.
If you do the vocals over, why not try a little harmony vocals here and there, Stan ?
But again : well done ! One of your best songs so far.
Chris
PS Oops, my post crossed your last post. Now I understand the thing about the "lead guitar" etc... : you've changed it since I listened the first time ! Anyway : well done, Stan.
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Post by sgulley on May 25, 2008 19:20:48 GMT
Hi Chris, You may have heard two different version since I don't know which one you just commented on. I replaced vocals, and the lead part was redone with a the crybaby Wah pedal in delicate parts. I put the Alvarez acoustic in to soften it some more. What you heard last night was right-on, the lead was being a little overplayed. Yeah, about the harmony parts, I see this more as a love (gone bad) ballad so I decided to tone it down and just simplify it.
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Post by chrisr on May 25, 2008 19:35:39 GMT
Yeah, my present comment was on the last version (the one with the Alvarez). Last night, I must have listened to your first version (with the prominent lead).
My suggestion regarding the harmony vocals still stands, but I realise that this would not be easy to sing at all. It's worth a try, though.
PS OOOOOps, our posts crossed again. Yeah, I understand your point about the harmony vocals. Never mind : it's very OK without those, Stan.
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Post by sgulley on May 25, 2008 19:42:06 GMT
I really appreciate your suggestion. I had lots of takes on 1st and 2nd versions of this so my vocals chords finally hit most of the notes wthout breaking. I think it would be a stretch trying to harmonize but who knows with the extra days off. Now that I'm very familiar with this tune, and it is labor day, I recorded a final vocal track and remixed. I think the refinement was beneficial so you might notice a difference.
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Post by mcarp555 on May 27, 2008 23:42:14 GMT
Labor day? Already?
Very melodic piece. The piano and airy lead parts give this a nice meandering feel. Not your normal style, but you've pulled it off well. The solo seems to have a funny transition going in, and then it sounds slightly overdriven for the type of song it is, but it might take a few more listens to get used to it. I wish you'd fade some of these songs; This one has plenty of atmosphere, then it just more or less cuts off.
Oh, and the organ part on the right seems to lend the piece a slight touch of zydeco, even tho it's not as busy as a real zydeco part would be. You know what I mean, I'm sure.
Nice Stan. This and the previous song would make a nice single.
Edit: I had another listen. The guitar is not overdriven. It's fine.
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Post by sgulley on May 28, 2008 1:37:07 GMT
Thanks Mike for your input. Yeah Memorial Day is always Labor Day for me for some absent-minded reason . I'm always getting 'em backwards. I've been known to call people by the wrong name.
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Post by Girl Friday on May 28, 2008 2:15:11 GMT
Stan, be it Memorial or Labor Day, THIS IS A GREAT SONG!! This is my favorite!!! What a lovely melody!!!! When I was listening, I had this image of a scene being sung on a theatre stage. It's so romantic!! Great job!
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Post by chrisr on May 28, 2008 11:32:23 GMT
I had another listen to your final version, Stan, and yes : it's very well done.
Plenty of atmosphere, nice melody, and your kind of "crying" voice underlines the mood of the lyrics, in my opinion.
But I agree with Mike : this kind of song asks for a fade out.
Chris
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Post by sgulley on May 28, 2008 16:22:32 GMT
Thanks GF for your complement and interpretation. It does give that kind of Angie-goodbye as its central theme. And Chris & Mike there is some dangling at the end which I should go into Audacity and cross-fade out.
I really appreciate all your help and comments!
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